POV Writing

How to Write an Unreliable Narrator (Without Cheating the Reader)

Kia Orion | | 10 min read

You spend enough time reading fiction and eventually you run into a narrator who's been lying to you the whole time. Sometimes you catch it early. Sometimes you don't realize until the last chapter, and then you go back and re-read the whole thing with a different set of eyes. A few things I've learned about how the good ones work.

The Best Unreliable Narrators Believe Their Own Version

Kazuo Ishiguro's The Remains of the Day is, on its surface, a novel about a butler named Stevens who takes a short road trip through the English countryside. He visits old acquaintances, reflects on his decades of service at Darlington Hall, thinks about Miss Kenton, the former housekeeper, and whether she might return to work at the estate. All of it delivered in the most measured, controlled, formal prose you've ever read.

And he is wrong about nearly everything.

Stevens isn't lying to you. That's the thing that makes the novel work. He genuinely believes he served a great man, that his devotion to duty was the correct choice, that his feelings for Miss Kenton were professional respect and nothing more. The gap between what Stevens reports and what actually happened creates the entire emotional architecture of the book, and it works because Stevens isn't performing for you. He's performing for himself, and you happen to be watching.

There's an analogy I keep coming back to. Think about corporate accounting before Enron collapsed. The books looked clean. Every number was categorized. Revenue was revenue, expenses were expenses, and there was a column called "miscellaneous" or "special purpose entities" where the real story was hiding. If you only read the summary, everything added up. You had to look at what had been categorized, what had been filed under a name that technically wasn't wrong but was clearly designed to keep you from asking questions.

Stevens does this with his own life. His father dies upstairs while he's serving dinner, and he categorizes it as duty. Miss Kenton stands in a doorway crying, and he categorizes it as a staffing concern. The prose is the ledger, and the entries are technically accurate, and the reader's job is to notice what's been filed under "miscellaneous."

If you want to write an unreliable narrator who works at this level, skip the question "what is my narrator hiding?" and ask instead "what does my narrator genuinely believe?" Because the best unreliable narrators aren't hiding from the reader. They're hiding from themselves, and the reader is just the first person to notice.

Some Narrators Lie to the Reader and Some Lie to Themselves

There are really two different things we mean when we say "unreliable narrator," and they require completely different techniques on the page.

The first kind hides facts. Agatha Christie's The Murder of Roger Ackroyd is the famous example. The narrator, Dr. Sheppard, is literally the murderer. He tells you everything that happened, walks you through the investigation, describes the clues and the suspects, and technically never lies. What he does is omit. A critical window of time gets skipped over. His actions are described in language that's precise enough to be accurate but vague enough to hide what he actually did. If you go back and re-read the novel after the reveal, every sentence holds up. Christie didn't cheat. She withheld.

The second kind hides feelings. That's Stevens. That's a narrator who tells you the facts more or less accurately but who can't see what the facts mean, who narrates around the emotional center of every scene the way you might walk around a hole in the floor without ever looking down.

The distinction matters for craft. If you're writing a fact-hider, your job is structural. You're controlling information. You need to know exactly what the reader knows at every point in the story, and you need to make the omissions invisible, which means surrounding them with enough real detail that the missing piece doesn't leave an obvious gap. Christie was a genius at this because she understood that readers don't notice what's absent. They notice what's present. Flood them with enough present detail and the absence disappears.

If you're writing a feeling-hider, your job is tonal. You're not controlling information so much as you're controlling register. Stevens gives you every fact. Miss Kenton was in the room. She was crying. He continued with his duties. The facts are all there. What's missing is the interpretation, the moment where a different narrator would say "and I felt something break inside me." Stevens never says that. He can't. And the reader has to feel it anyway.

One hides what happened. The other hides what it felt like.

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Beautiful Prose Is the Most Dangerous Form of Unreliability

Vladimir Nabokov's Lolita opens with one of the most famous paragraphs in English literature. "Lolita, light of my life, fire of my loins." The rhythm is hypnotic. The consonants cascade. The sentence breaks apart and reconstructs itself with the precision of a watchmaker, and you can read it five times and still find something new in how the sounds move through it.

And the man writing it is a monster.

Nabokov understood something about prose that I don't think gets discussed enough in craft conversations. Beautiful writing isn't neutral. It does work on the reader. It creates trust, sympathy, a willingness to follow wherever the sentences lead. Humbert Humbert's narration is so gorgeous and witty, so obviously self-aware in all the right literary ways, that the reader can start to forget what the sentences are actually describing. The prose becomes a kind of spell, and breaking the spell requires the reader to actively resist the pleasure of the language, which most readers won't do, at least not on the first read.

Here's the analogy I keep thinking about. Imagine someone tuning a guitar perfectly. Every string in exact pitch. The intonation is flawless. And then they play a song that's completely wrong for the room, a love song at a funeral, say, and because the instrument sounds so good, because every note rings true, it takes you a few bars to realize that what you're hearing is inappropriate, that the beauty of the performance is actually making the wrongness worse.

That's Humbert. His prose is the perfectly tuned guitar. The song is monstrous. And Nabokov's genius is that he trusts the reader to eventually hear the dissonance, to reach a sentence where the beauty of the language and the ugliness of the content collide so violently that you can't pretend you weren't complicit in listening.

If you're writing an unreliable narrator and you want the unreliability to live in the prose itself, you have to be willing to write beautifully in the service of something wrong. That's a hard thing to do on purpose. Most of us want our best sentences to carry our best ideas. Nabokov gave his best sentences to his worst character and let the reader sit with what that meant.

The Reader Needs to Be Smarter Than the Narrator

This is the part where a lot of unreliable narrator stories fall apart, and I'm not sure why it doesn't get talked about more. If the reader can't figure out that the narrator is unreliable, or at least sense that something is off, the technique doesn't work. It just becomes a narrator who's wrong, and the reader has no way to access the real story underneath.

Gillian Flynn's Gone Girl is a masterclass in this. The novel gives you two narrators, Nick and Amy, and neither one feels quite right from the start. Nick's account of his marriage has gaps in it, moments where he seems to be skipping over something he doesn't want to examine. Amy's diary entries are almost too vivid, too perfectly structured, the kind of writing that reads like someone composing a narrative rather than recording a life. Flynn doesn't tell you that either narrator is lying. She gives you signals.

The signals are specific, and they're worth studying if you want to write this kind of POV. Look for word choices that don't match the emotional register of the scene. A narrator describing something devastating with too much composure, or something ordinary with too much intensity. Details that get repeated in slightly different versions. And then there are the moments where the narrator skips over something quickly, almost hoping you won't notice, the way someone telling a story at dinner will rush past the part where they were wrong.

Flynn plants these signals early and often, and the reader picks them up almost unconsciously, the way you pick up that something's off about a person before you can articulate what it is. By the time the reveals come, you're not shocked so much as confirmed. You knew. You didn't know the specifics, but you knew the narration wasn't trustworthy, and that knowing, that sense of having been smarter than the voice on the page, is half the pleasure of the book.

The practical lesson here is that you have to give the reader enough to work with. You can't just decide your narrator is unreliable and then write them as if they're reliable until the big twist. The unreliability has to leak through the prose from the beginning, in small ways, in word choices and rhythms and the things the narrator lingers on versus the things they rush past.

Unreliable Narration Rewards the Re-Read

One thing that connects Christie, Ishiguro, Nabokov, and Flynn, for all their differences, is that their unreliable narrators create two completely different reading experiences. The first read is one story. The second read is another.

The Murder of Roger Ackroyd on a re-read is an entirely different book. Every sentence Dr. Sheppard writes, each careful omission, the moments where he steers your attention somewhere specific, all of it becomes visible in a way it wasn't before. You can see the architecture. The first time through, you were inside the maze. The second time, you're above it.

The Remains of the Day does the same thing differently. On a first read, Stevens's formality seems like a character trait. On a second read, it's a defense mechanism, and you can see exactly where the defenses go up, exactly which scenes required him to use the most controlled prose because they were the ones that threatened to break through his composure. I don't know what to make of the fact that the most emotionally devastating moments in that novel are the ones Stevens writes with the least emotion. Maybe that's the whole point.

If your unreliable narrator doesn't reward re-reading, there's a good chance the unreliability is cosmetic. A trick ending. A gotcha. The unreliable narrators that stay with you are the ones where the second reading feels like meeting someone you thought you knew and realizing you were only getting half the story.


All characters narrate their own lives unreliably. So do all people, probably. We tell ourselves why we did what we did, and the reasons are always a little cleaner than the truth, more flattering, better organized. Daily writing practice is partly about learning to hear that gap, the space between the story a character tells and the story the reader receives. You get better at hearing it the same way you get better at anything. You sit with it every morning, a few hundred words at a time, and you practice listening for the places where the narrator's voice and the narrator's truth don't quite line up.

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Kia Orion

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