First Chapter

How to Write an Opening Line

Kia Orion | | 6 min read

There's more advice about opening lines than any other sentence in fiction. Most of it amounts to the same instruction: create intrigue, drop the reader in the middle of action. As if the problem with a bad first line is that it isn't loud enough.

The Opening Line Makes a Promise About the Kind of Reading Experience This Will Be

Jane Austen's "It is a truth universally acknowledged, that a single man in possession of a good fortune must be in want of a wife" promises irony and social observation. You know before the first character appears that this book will be sharp and wry, and that class and marriage will run through everything. The sentence is doing something more interesting than hooking you. It's calibrating your attention. It's telling you to read with one eyebrow raised.

Kafka's "Someone must have slandered Josef K., for one morning, without having done anything wrong, he was arrested" promises bewildering institutional injustice. The passive voice, the resigned logic of "must have," the strange calmness of a man reasoning through his own arrest. These lines don't introduce the story so much as they tell you how to read it.

That's the thing most advice about opening lines misses. The reader needs to know what kind of attention to bring. A thriller opening asks for different reading muscles than a literary novel. The first sentence sets the frequency, and everything after either holds that signal or loses it. When you write your opening line, you're calibrating how the reader will care, not whether they will.

Voice Shows Up in the First Sentence or Arrives Too Late to Matter

Daphne du Maurier's "Last night I dreamt I went to Manderley again." In twelve words: the narrator has lost something, is looking back from a distance, and the house matters more than any person will. The voice arrives before the character does. You don't know her name or her circumstances. But you know her. You know her because of the word "again," which carries the weight of obsession and longing all at once.

Compare that to an opening line that's just action: "She ran through the forest." Nothing about who she is, what she's running from emotionally. It's a camera angle with no photographer behind it. Voice shows up in word choice, in the gap between what's said and what's felt. A character who opens by noticing the weather is different from one who opens by noticing what nobody else in the room seems to notice. Voice shows up in that first choice of what to see.

I'm not entirely sure voice can be manufactured. I think it appears, or doesn't appear, in the first sentence you write when you stop trying to sound like a writer. The moment you stop performing, you start revealing. And what you reveal, accidentally, in that unguarded first line is usually more interesting than anything you could have engineered.

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The Best Opening Lines Feel Inevitable Rather Than Engineered

George Orwell's "It was a bright cold day in April, and the clocks were striking thirteen." The strangeness of "striking thirteen" arrives so casually that you almost don't notice it's wrong. That's the technique: deliver the uncanny with the confidence of the mundane. Orwell doesn't pause to let you appreciate the weirdness. He moves on. And because he moves on, you trust him.

Most writers trying to write a great opening line can be felt trying. The attempt is visible. You can sense the writer standing behind the sentence, watching your face, waiting for you to be impressed. The line calls attention to itself when it should be calling attention to the world it's building.

S.E. Hinton's "When I stepped out into the bright sunlight from the darkness of the movie house, I had only two things on my mind: Paul Newman and a ride home." This doesn't announce itself as a great opening. It's just a body in a specific place thinking about specific things. Paul Newman and a ride home. The specificity is what makes it feel real and the more specific a line gets the less it sounds like an opening line and the more it sounds like someone actually talking to you about their life, which is all a reader really wants in that first moment. The more you try to write a first line that sounds important, the less it sounds like anything at all.

The First Line Gets Its Power From What the Second Line Does

Opening lines are not standalone sentences. They become great or mediocre based on what comes after them. Nabokov's "Lolita, light of my life, fire of my loins" only works because the next sentence continues the obsessive alliteration: "Lo-lee-ta: the tip of the tongue taking a trip of three steps down the palate to tap, at three, on the teeth." It's the two-sentence system that tells you what kind of prose you're in. The mouth itself is performing. The rhythm is the meaning.

Most writers approach the first line as if it has to carry the entire weight of the novel. It doesn't. It has to carry the weight of the second sentence. That's a much smaller, much more achievable thing. The second sentence is what determines whether the reader takes the first one seriously or skips past it. So if you're stuck on your opening, try writing the second line first. Figure out where the story goes in sentence two, then back into what sentence one needs to set up. Sometimes the door is easier to build when you already know what room it opens into.

For more on first chapter craft, see our guides on how to write a first chapter and common first chapter mistakes.

I think about opening lines the way I think about meeting someone for the first time. What you remember isn't what they said but whether they seemed like someone who was going to be honest with you. The best first lines feel like that. They feel like a person you'd trust to tell you a long story.

Your opening line doesn't need to be the best sentence you've ever written. It needs to be the most honest one. Write it last if you have to. Write it after you know what the book actually became, rather than what you hoped it would be when you started. The first line is just a handshake. The book is the conversation.

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Kia Orion

Author of The Writer's Daily Practice, the #1 Bestselling book in Journal Writing and Writing Skills. He writes a free daily reflection for writers.

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