Dark Romance

The Dark Romance Heroine Most Writers Write Wrong

Kia Orion | | 9 min read

Anna Todd posted the first chapter of After on Wattpad in 2013. She was twenty-four, living in Texas, writing on her phone between shifts. The story was a Harry Styles fanfiction, which is the kind of origin detail that makes people in literary circles uncomfortable. By 2014, Todd's story had accumulated over a billion reads on the platform. Simon & Schuster published it. A film franchise followed. Total copies sold across the series passed eleven million.

Most of the writing advice generated by After's success focuses on Hardin, the male lead. The brooding type. Volatile. Readers couldn't stop talking about him, so that's where the craft analysis went. But I've been thinking about Tessa lately, and I think we've been looking at the wrong character.

Tessa Young isn't dragged into Hardin's world. She walks in. She has a stable boyfriend. She has a plan for college, for her future, for the kind of person she wants to be. And then she starts making choices that dismantle all of it, piece by piece, with her eyes open. The first time she goes to Hardin's apartment, she knows. When she goes back, she still knows. Todd doesn't write Tessa as someone swept up in something she can't control. She writes her as someone who can see the wreckage ahead and goes anyway.

That distinction, between a heroine who falls and a heroine who jumps, is the thing most dark romance writers get wrong about their female protagonist. And it changes everything about how the book reads.

She Has to Want Something Before He Arrives

The most common version of a dark romance heroine I see in early drafts goes something like this: she exists in a neutral state, and then the hero shows up and creates the story. Her life before him is a blank. Maybe there's a sentence about her job or her apartment. But there's nothing she's reaching for, nothing she'd be doing if the inciting incident never came.

This is a structural problem more than a character problem. When the heroine has no desire of her own before the hero enters the narrative, every choice she makes afterward is a response to him. She becomes reactive by default, and reactive protagonists are hard to root for across 80,000 words, even in dark romance, where the power dynamics are part of the appeal.

Tarryn Fisher understands this. In The Wives, the protagonist Thursday isn't waiting for a love interest to generate conflict. She's already tangled in a situation she built herself into, married to a man she shares with two other women, and the obsession that drives the plot belongs entirely to her. It's her curiosity, her jealousy, her inability to leave a question unanswered. The man at the center is almost incidental to the real engine, which is Thursday's need to know. Fisher gives her heroine something to want that has nothing to do with romance, and then lets the dark romance happen around it.

Try this when you're drafting your dark romance female protagonist: write her first chapter without the hero in it. What does she do? Where does she go? What's the thing she's trying to figure out, or get, or escape? If that chapter has no energy on its own, you've built a character who can only exist in relation to someone else. That's a supporting character, not a lead.

The Bad Choice Has to Be Hers

There's a version of the dark romance heroine who keeps ending up in dangerous situations through bad luck, circumstance, or the hero's machinations. Things happen to her. She gets kidnapped, trapped, cornered, manipulated into a position where she has no real option but to stay. And I understand the appeal of that setup for the plot. It creates intensity quickly.

But there's a cost. Every time the heroine's involvement in the dark situation is something she didn't choose, the reader's relationship to her shifts. She becomes someone to worry about. The specific tension dark romance runs on is watching someone make a decision you can't quite believe she's making, and a heroine who stumbles into the story instead of walking into it takes that off the table.

The Wattpad readers who made After a phenomenon weren't worried about Tessa. They were fascinated by her. There's a difference. Todd made Tessa the one who walks toward the fire, and that meant readers had to sit with their own reaction to her choices rather than projecting rescue fantasies. It's a harder thing to write because you can't rely on sympathy. You have to earn something more complicated than that.

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Fear and Want in the Same Sentence

I don't know exactly when this became clear to me, but at some point I noticed that the dark romance scenes I remembered months later all had the same quality. The heroine was afraid and attracted at the same time, and the narrative didn't resolve that tension. It let both feelings sit in the same paragraph, sometimes the same sentence, without choosing between them.

This is incredibly hard to do on the page. The instinct is to clarify. To let fear win one paragraph and desire win the next, like a tennis match, so the reader always knows which feeling is in charge. But the heroines who stay with you, the ones readers describe as "getting under their skin," are the ones where the fear is the attraction, or the attraction is inseparable from the risk, and the character herself can't sort out where one ends and the other begins.

Nikki St. Crowe does something interesting with this in the Never Never series. Her heroine Winnie doesn't oscillate between being afraid of Peter Pan and being drawn to him. Those states are simultaneous. St. Crowe writes Winnie's interiority so that the danger and the pull exist in the same thought, run through the same interior monologue without a clean break, and the result is a character who feels genuinely destabilized in a way that gives the romance its charge. The text keeps those two experiences in the same sentence, the same breath, without letting either one win.

If you're writing a scene where your dark romance heroine encounters the love interest and you find yourself alternating between fear paragraphs and attraction paragraphs, try collapsing them. Put both in one sentence. Let her notice the thing that scares her and the thing that draws her in the same breath. See what happens to the tension.

What She's Running From Shapes the Whole Book

Most dark romance heroines are running toward something. The hero. The dangerous situation. The version of herself she hasn't met yet. But the ones that feel real on the page, the dark romance female protagonists who hold up across a whole series, are also running from something specific. A family situation, a self-image, a version of safety that felt like suffocation.

Tarryn Fisher's earlier work, Folded Notes from High School, has a protagonist whose obsessive behavior makes more sense the more you learn about what she's trying to escape. Fisher doesn't front-load the backstory. She lets it surface in the way the character reacts to small things, the things she notices, the things she avoids mentioning. By the time you understand what's behind her behavior, you're already invested in her, and the understanding deepens the investment rather than explaining it away.

That's the key, I think. The thing the heroine is running from works best as context for her interiority, a way of deepening the reader's sense of who she is. When it becomes an explanation for why she stays, the character flattens. The reader who finishes a scene knowing more about her, carrying a fuller picture of who she is and what she wants, is the reader who keeps reading.


Writing the dark romance heroine is, I'm fairly sure, harder than writing the dark hero. The hero gets to be mysterious. His interiority can be withheld. The heroine, especially in first-person or close-third, has to let the reader into her head for hundreds of pages, and what the reader finds there has to be strange enough to be honest and coherent enough to follow and conflicted enough to keep the pages turning, all at the same time. It's a lot to hold together. I'm not sure most craft advice treats it with the seriousness it deserves.

But when it works, when a writer builds a heroine who has her own wants before the hero arrives and lets fear and desire occupy the same thought without resolving them too cleanly, the result is a character readers can't shake. The hero might be the fantasy. The heroine is the reason they believe it.

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